Sit and stay a spell,
Before life takes you
Away.
I am going to write a love story
Across your lungs
So you can exhale
Sweet things
When you can't
Find the words.
Sing to me
That pretty,
Tragic little song.
The one about how
She broke your name
And took your bones.
I will find each fragmented piece
And clean out
All the maggots.
My dearest,
Your windows are broken,
Cracked and tear-streaked.
Allow me to mend you;
Stained glass
Is far more beautiful
That just a pair of
Empty eyes.
Come outside
And we will dance
In the freezing rain.
We can help each other
Wash off all the poisons
Left clinging
To the backs of our minds
And the insides
Of our mouths.
Sleep now,
Lovely birds.
And cease
Flying in circles.
Tomorrow
I will take you past
The farthest horizons,
Where no cages will
Ever
Keep you again.
Thank you, so much! I really appreciate you sharing your thoughts with me, dear. And I'm so very glad you enjoyed it. ^^
That pretty,
Tragic little song.
The one about how
She broke your name
And took your bones.
That right there. That's my favorite part. That part is haunting. I love the way you traded name and bones from the verbs that would normally go with them. It was just jarring enough to induce thought. Got me asking questions of the piece and reading it more closely to try and discover the answers.
Thanks, so very much, dear! I'm really glad you liked it so well. ^^
Originally, I had written it in the reversed order, the one that you would think it would be written in, but it didn't quite seem to fit the meaning I was trying to go for. So, I switched them, and it made much more sense... At least, to me lol
Thank you for sharing that with me, though! I love being able to read other people's thoughts and perspectives that way. ^^
but also it doesn't have to be read that way. and it's nice because the speaker is like comforting by asking to be sung songs, like making the other feel more important or something.
this is a very vague comment but so are my thoughts.