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He has a pretty tune in his heart
With the lyrics plastered
On strips of delicate, ashen paper
That crumble at the slightest touch.

They hang against the
Edges of his lips,
Trying to pour out,
But ever uncertain
Of whether the wind will carry their weight.
He has a pretty tune in his heart

That,

Some day,

Will help him find his way

Back home.


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-Do you feel something when you read this piece? If so, what?

-Do you have a favorite part? A least favorite?

-What do you think this piece means?

I love hearing from you, dears!









© *Cugra
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WingsInTheShad0ws Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The second stanza makes me think of revealing your true feelings to someone. And that part in the description reminds me of the trip I am planning.

I have a question for you now, did you have a specific person in mind when you wrote this?
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm glad you enjoyed it, but even more so that you could see a bit of yourself in my work. ^^ That makes me so happy, I couldn't even tell you~

As a matter of fact, I did. I wrote the first few lines without really meaning anything by them, but then realized that they reminded me of someone I hold very dear to me, so I altered what I had previously written, and then added the second stanza.
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anonymous-yet-again Featured By Owner Oct 14, 2012   Writer
I like it; it's like it could be a songwriter who's just afraid if people will like his song, or someone who has his own views and his own way of seeing things but who doesn't know if his views are supported by other people, or just the world in general.
just my own strange ideas about it. yeah.
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Oct 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, dear! I'm so glad you liked it. ^^

And thank you, again, for sharing your thoughts with me. X3

Truthfully, I wrote it about one, specific person I know, but I rather like your perspective, hahah. I suppose it could pertain exactly to those things.
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Amanda-Graham Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Professional Writer
a lovely work filled with angst .. thank you for submitting to Love-Literature
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, very much ^^ I'm glad you enjoyed it!

And believe me, it was entirely my pleasure. XD
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