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There were
Timeless moments spent between us,
In those instants and hours before dawn;

That time when we traversed
So far away from this
Wretched house and into
The most delicious darkness
Of Andromeda-

That time before our tidal waves
Came crashing down on us again.

I would do anything to
Drown with you.

The softness of the flesh
Between your knuckles, the
Exquisite map of
Leigh-lines
On your palms;

They were like a lullaby
To my sleepy fingertips.

You used
The breath of your mouth
To teach me to close my eyes
And fall asleep.

Your contented whispers and
Observations of the sky
Showed me then how to dream.

I had no idea what home could be like
Until those seconds and infinities.

As you traveled the expanse
Between my
Fragmented collarbones
With the curiosity of your hands and
The rebuke of your lips,

I laughed,

Because you always liked
To fix things
That were broken.
( Until eternity.

I can't believe

I almost

Forgot to count. )


--

-Is there a feeling you get upon reading this piece?

-What do you think it's about?

-Do you have any favorite or least favorite parts?









© *SomethingOnceSacred
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Da-Vinch Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Professional Artisan Crafter
this is magic to the soul. I felt a sadness in what it portrays. I feel something had ended and this is a memory of those magic moments that burn into our memories for ever. I particularly love;
The softness of the flesh 
Between your knuckles, the
Exquisite map of 
Leigh-lines 
On your palms; 

They were like a lullaby 
To my sleepy fingertips. 

You used 
The breath of your mouth 
To teach me to close my eyes 
And fall asleep. 
This is such a special way for one to give to another.......
As tear fill my eyes, I say thank you for this.



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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Oct 21, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Goodness XD; Wow, it's really flattering to see I've made such an impact on someone. Thank you very much for sharing that with me. 
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SDKadin Featured By Owner Dec 27, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Reading this brings on a sense of miasma and oblivion, being saturated and brightened by a new light. Light filtering through strands of sticky darkness until the volume is revealed to house a whole heart's potential.

Or something else like that.
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, my XD Hahah, such pretty words for a comment.

I'm glad you enjoyed it, doll.
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SDKadin Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Yeah. I did like it.
But I'm gonna try to not leave anymore melodramatic comments. ._.
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Pff, nah. Hahah, it was nice to read something like that. Made me smile.
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SDKadin Featured By Owner Dec 28, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Woot. I did good.
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GeekGirl97 Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
ok, so this is absolutely GORGEOUS :33

The poem gives me a nostalgic feeling, also a kind of brokeness, like the feeling you have when somebody leaves you and you don't know what is going to happen next, if things are ever going to be the same again

I really don't get the REAL theme of the poem, because I suspect it's from personal experience, but for me it's about two persons that share a special bond but at the end something just doesn't seems right because differences are too strong

or at least that's what I get from the parts I can relate to...

and definetely, my favorite part is:

"That time before our tidal waves
Came crashing down on us again.

I would do anything to
Drown with you. "

I loved your poem, it's very beautiful :love:
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, my goodness XD;

First of all, thank you, very much, for your lovely comment and for sharing your thoughts and feelings on it with me, dear! I can't ask for anything more than that.

You are absolutely right in saying that it is based on a personal experience. ^^ However, the ending is a little happier than what you've interpreted.

But I very much love your perspective on it and I can definitely see how it can be read that way!

Thanks again for giving my piece of attention, dear! I really appreciate that. ^^
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GeekGirl97 Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Haha, I'm glad it had a happy ending :33

And you are welcome, it was nothing!!! ;DDD
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TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I would do anything to
Drown with you.
:heart:

Beautiful piece. :) As I read it the song C'est La Mort by The Civil Wars came into my head. :) It's a beautiful song, and well worth a listen if you haven't heard it already. :D
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you, dear! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. ^^

And I shall have to give that a listen when I next get the chance!
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TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Nov 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're welcome. :)
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c1oud9 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is beautiful
I love the last line because it just speaks volumes about all of it..it's also really relatable
Great poem :D
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks so much, dear! I'm so glad you enjoyed it! ^^
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livinglove99 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012
This is beautifully written! For me personally it made me appreciate the sweet 'simple nothings' that a lot of people fail to recognize as the best part of life.

"You used
The breath of your mouth
To teach me to close my eyes
And fall asleep."

That would be my favorite part because it makes me think of all the peaceful moments that I have shared with my husband after I ask him to talk to me until I fall asleep on those nights that my mind is racing and won't quit.

Again, beautiful!
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, my goodness XD

Thank you, dear! I'm so glad you enjoyed it, first of all.

And, secondly, thank you for sharing your feelings on the piece with me! That's always such a treat and I can't ask for anything better than that.
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monstroooo Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, this one's beautiful :love:

Tiny criticsm, is "rebuke" the wrong word in "The rebuke of your lips"? To rebuke means to reject or even scorn, which doesn't seem to fit. Unless I've missed something...
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hahah, I understand where you're coming from, definitely. It does seem like an odd word choice.

But, I based this piece off of something that happened between a dear friend and I, and, believe me, it fits the situation.

I didn't have the heart to change it to a prettier word, because it wouldn't have been documenting what happened, so I decided on 'rebuke' because it was what was going on.

I really appreciate your feedback, though! Thank you so much, dear!
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monstroooo Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Fair enough :) You're welcome!
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Cait-Cait93 Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
This is very lovely.

I feel myself connecting to the emotions in the words. I feel like this describes how I feel towards someone, how mesmerizing he tends to be in my eyes.

I don't know what this is about, only how it translates personally to myself.

My favorite part was the last stanza, though honestly I loved the entire piece as a whole.

Truly wonderful.
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, gosh.

Wow, I'm so glad you liked it, dear. Thank you for sharing your thoughts on the piece with me. I really appreciate that.
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Cait-Cait93 Featured By Owner Nov 10, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
:D
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sabokugaara Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012
soo beautiful it brings tears to my eyes
my favorite part is
That time when we traversed
So far away from this
Wretched house and into
The most delicious darkness
Of Andromeda-
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Nov 9, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, gosh XD

Thank you, dear! I'm so glad you liked it!
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