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"Kill me gently,"
You said.
And handed me the blade
Made out of all the things
We said we would do
Some day.

Some day was soon,
And then,
It was yesterday.

We have wasted
All of our "tomorrow"s;
I fear that, now,
As we face the edge
Of this universe,
We do not have the strength
To reach the next.

"You'll come with me,
Right?
"

Staring at the bottomless pit,

I need to stay here
And day-dream a little longer
About each one of
Our
"What if"s
And
"We will"s.

I can pretend,
Just for a moment,
That we have happy memories,
Instead of
Simply swallowing my heartache.

Your assisted suicide
Will have to wait;
I have found myself in
New sunrises-

Ones with
Less black-mailing "I love you"s
And much more freedom.

Take back your blade,
Beloved parasite,
I will no longer
Be needing it.  
( and pulling away )

( finally )


--

I feel like I can actually breathe again.

And nothing has ever felt better.

--

-What did you feel while reading this piece?

-What did you like about it?

-What did you dislike about it?

-How does it make you feel?









© *Cugra
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monstroooo Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
That's an absolutely brilliant opening verse. I didn't read suicide in it, like *intricately-ordinary, but I loved it all the same.

It sounds like a complicated piece to help cure a complicated relationship. It makes me think the protagonist was a victim of an abusive (emotionally) and draining relationship. It also makes me think they're glad to be out of it.
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Oct 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hahah, it can be read all sorts of different ways, I'm sure.

Thanks you very much, though! I really appreciate you sharing that with me.

Also, I'm sure you've hit the nail on the head with your observation: that is exactly what I wrote it about, from personal experience, unfortunately. I'm recently out of a rather toxic friendship. But, you're also exactly right in deducing that I'm very glad to be out of it.
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WingsInTheShad0ws Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
The main thing that came to my mind was all of the things I have said I want to do someday and I wondered If I would ever get to do them.

And it's great to hear you are better! ^^
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thanks much for sharing your thoughts with me, dear! I really appreciate that.

And yes XD Me, too.
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"And handed me the blade
Made out of all the things
We said we would do
Some day. "

best metaphor for suicide I've read in a long time, perhaps ever.

I truly cannot express how incredibly happy I am that you are feeling better. truly, truly, truly, I am so so glad! you deserve it all and I am so happy you can stand on your feet and tell the bad thoughts to go away.

this is beautiful, as is all your work. I'm so happy you can breathe :heart:
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Oct 11, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, my goodness, thank you, sugar!

Yes, it is, indeed, a good feeling to be able to find strength in myself again. ^^

In all honesty, this was written with a close friendship that has recently come to an end. I'm upset, naturally, but through it I've been able to find myself out a little better and situate myself on sturdier ground, so to speak, and I no longer need a crutch to lean on.

Specifically one that seems to have been sucking the life out of me lol

Thank you so much for your lovely comment, deary, in any case! You have no idea how much I appreciate that. ^^
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intricately-ordinary Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sorry about the situation with your friend. It definitely sounds like you made the right decision, though. I know what it's like to be around someone who's toxic, you will do better without her. :heart:
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Oct 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I'm sure most people know this feeling very well.

Thank you, dearest! I appreciate that.

And I'm absolutely certain I'm better off without him. ^^
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