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Little girl,
You have out-grown
Yourself, and these
Childish notions of
Monsters in the closet.

Each morning,
She holds her breath
Until the sun rises,
Because no one taught her
How to sleep
With her eyes closed.


There is this
Delusion about you;
A belief that if
You stay awake,
There will be no darkness.

It is damaging you.

She lays,
Cold and silent,
With her darkened fantasies,

And remembers a time
When she was not-so-
Softly breaking
Into unrecognizable shards.


Careless drifter,
You have found your only
Escape
From all the lifetimes
You were
Too fearful to live.

Rest now,
Frightened child,
Too lost in your waking dreams
To see new realities.

It will all
Be over soon.
( It is as if

I have been sleeping

For a thousand years. )


--

--What do you read in it? Thoughts? Feelings?

--Is there a particular part you liked? Disliked?

--If you can apply a feeling to this piece, what is it? And have you ever experienced it before?









*SomethingOnceSacred
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ScrollLockNumLock Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
wow i held my breath when i read this, really a beautiful piece. short and powerful.
i was at a noisy environment, and when i read this, everything went blurry and slow motion. your writing whisks me to the oddest of places, this is beautiful, wonderful job. :D
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Jul 3, 2014  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much for sharing that with me, it brought a smile to my face. I am glad you enjoyed the piece. 
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student Writer
Hello again...you have been feature here.
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, my goodness XD Thanks so much, dear!
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student Writer
:giggle: No problem! :)
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Cionie Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Professional General Artist
This is very relatable for many people here, I think. Very well done :)
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Thank you very much, dear! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. ^^
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Sleyf Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Hi!

Congratulations! This piece has been featured in our Weekly Round-up

Thanks so much for writing it!

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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, my goodness!

Thank you so much!
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Sleyf Featured By Owner Nov 19, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
You're welcome!
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Student Writer
"Apparition" leaves me with a sense of a fractured girl weaving the world around her with silent daffodils and calming whirlwinds. She has the power, strength, courage, and passion to accomplish that which she puts her mind to, yet fails to do so. Fear overpowers her, she may have outgrown the monsters under the bed but they have not outgrown her. (soon they will drag her down to their alcove and her spirit will be lost to the waking world)

Gorgeous work!

As a passing piece of advice, capitalizing the first word of every line leads to a jilted flow, the reader constantly starting a fresh thought (as if the line breaks weren't enough of a deterrent). However, this is simply advice, nothing concrete. :)
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Nov 15, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, my!

What a beautiful image you've painted for me with your description! Hahah, I'm so flattered, thank you, dear!

I really appreciate you sharing your thoughts on the piece with me that way.

Ah, yes, I definitely see what you mean about the capitalization, however, I don't believe I'll be changing the way I do things. It bothers me if each line isn't capitalized XD;;
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Student Writer
You are welcome! :)

Ah, that's fine (I have the opposite issue with capitalization...I find it too much a thought break ^^;)!
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Nov 20, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Hahah, that's perfectly understandable. ^^ To each their own~
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LightOverpowers58 Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2012  Student Writer
Mhm, I'd drink to that.
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TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
This is really quite haunting, and I get the feeling of the narrator directing this piece to the spirit of a child. Something about it just feels very paranormal/spiritual to me. :)

I love the lines:

Careless drifter,
You have found your only
Escape
From all the lifetimes
You were
Too fearful to live.


It reads beautifully. :)
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, gosh XD;

First of all, thank you for your lovely comment and for sharing your thoughts with me, dear. X3 As always, I really appreciate that.

I suppose one could definitely view it that way, hahah. It's interesting to read other people's perspectives on it.
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TheMoorMaiden Featured By Owner Nov 14, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
You're very welcome. :)
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Janoera Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Student Digital Artist
I like this piece. It's rather melancholy, and I feel somber after reading it.

I like this particular part:
Careless drifter,
You have found your only
Escape
From all the lifetimes
You were
Too fearful to live.

Somehow, I relate suicide to this piece. Some people believe that dying is like sleeping forever, and I feel that the "little girl" dislikes her life, but don't really want to be rid of it yet or don't have the courage to do so.

Rest now,
Frightened child,
Too lost in your waking dreams
To see new realities.

This stanza seems to be saying something like "take a break from life by sleeping and forgetting, but eventually you have to wake up and face the world".

That's how I interpret it anyway :D
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Nov 13, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Alright, first off, let me thank you for such a lovely comment XD; I cannot tell you how much I enjoy reading other people's perspectives this way. Thank you so much, dear!

What a very interesting way of looking at it. I can definitely see where you'd be able to read suicide in it. That makes a lot of sense.

And your last observation is almost exactly spot-on with what I had in mind while writing it XD

Hahah, thanks very much again, darlin'! I'm so glad you enjoyed it. ^^
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februaryblue Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
"There is this / Delusion about you; / A belief that if / You stay awake, / There will be no darkness."

That line reminds me of how people try to put something out of their memory and forget, but of course it's impossible to forget; you have to face darkness, you can't stay awake all the time, and using your own metaphors eventually people have to wake up from their dreams and start living in reality again. The last couple of lines make me think that "It's okay, you'll wake up soon and you won't have a choice - you'll get over it."

It's a powerful piece, and I like it.
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Oh, goodness.

First of all, thank you for such a lovely comment, dear! I can't ask for anything better than that. It's always such a treat for me to read another person's perspective on something I wrote.

I'm so glad you enjoyed it, as well.

Your thoughts on the piece are quite similar to the state of mind I had while writing it, actually. Hahah, it's a bit shocking.
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februaryblue Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Of course, it's always nice to receive comments!

But I'm glad that I could relate to your thoughts about the piece, that's effective writing. ^^
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Eisielae Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
It makes me feel almost like everything is so fragile that if i were to sleep that everything including myself would break. ANOTHER MASTER PIECE MY LOVE
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SomethingOnceSacred Featured By Owner Nov 12, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Wow, what an interesting way of seeing it. o.o

Hahah, thank you for sharing your thoughts with me! I really appreciate that.

And I'm so glad you enjoyed it, dear! ^^
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